Monday, April 26, 2010

NaPoWriMo #18: no rhythm

I was thinking about what I wrote about meter: that I have a hard time with anything involving rhythm, because it just doesn't come naturally. And it occurred to me that when I write in meter, I always feel like I'm watching my feet instead of actually feeling the rhythm of the meter. Which in turn led to this little snippet of a poem.

Two Right Feet Still Make a Wrong Rhythm

Dance with abandon
shake shake shake shake it
when no one’s around
caught up by sound
rhythm and flow I’m
detached from the ground

dancing in a crowd
fake fake fake fake it
counting with each beat
and watching my feet
stilted and slow I’ve
got shoes of concrete.


Dyann said...

That's because you're missing your feather boa!

chicklegirl said...

[Smacks forehead with palm] Doh! So that's what I've been doing wrong!