The prompt this week at Read Write Poem is to mix and match poetic forms. Ren suggested a great site with a massive list of different forms of poetry. This is a tritina, but written as a series of haiku.Beneath the Hawthorn
Canopy above
of hawthorn boughs pink laden
on green lawn I lie
it would seem a lie
to say I could rise above
so heavy laden
crushed grass is laden
beside me love's burden lies
azure torn above
a filigree of branch on sky above where I lightly laden lie.
Canopy above
of hawthorn boughs pink laden
on green lawn I lie
it would seem a lie
to say I could rise above
so heavy laden
crushed grass is laden
beside me love's burden lies
azure torn above
a filigree of branch on sky above where I lightly laden lie.
5 comments:
I love this, especially the last line. I'm not familiar with this form but it has such great possibilities. Thanks for posting this.
Love it! A pretty poem, with a wonderful mixture. The summer or spring setting calls to me. nice to hear you read as well. It definitely adds to the experience.
Thanks for introducing me to the tritina -- it looks like fun. Your poem is evocative of the scene, branches and sunlight. Quite lovely.
thait is lovely, very grounded in the specifics of place. i love the line 'azure torn above'
i really liked the poem and i really really really liked listening to you read it. never sounds as good in my head. THANK YOU! MOREMOREMORE!
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